I have a problem with decreased fertilization in 2 days of last blowing your load... in reality a week of waiting makes a man produce a much larger load and a man having sex multiple times a day ends up with a much smaller load... just stating facts.
I mean the story and setting is fine. The art is good, the writing's fine, I don't dislike the MC. I appreciate he has reservations and concerns about it all and doesn't just instantly go full horndog.
But I suppose the question is... what is the ultimate goal? Is it going to be a KN where we follow along on Jake's adventures? Or will an option be added later to deny girls skipping their story? Will it be a continuous romp introducing more and more girls? Or will we have a select cast that the story revolves around? Seeing the aftermaths of their lives and stories. Will it remain a pregnancy romp? Or will it go down the path of Jake wanting more from one or some of the girls he's knocked up? The bit in the intro where he looked at the family commenting on wanting a life like that. Kinda sets it up for a possibility.
I'd give more feedback other then it was fine. But I don't know what I'm working with here.
I like the drawing style. I like also that everything happens so fast and you can do it in public. BUT....there's not a story line. In the long period it becomes boring very fast. It needs a storyline. Try to add more background to the main character and add also his family. Do some Sweet Home Alabama scenes. Madison is not enough. Also remove the chapter menu. Let the scene fade in the next one. It has potential
That was pretty good. I enjoyed Gail's design. Though it was a little jarring how the public was just immediately blasé about the people having sex in public when the announcement was one day old. They were getting cum all over the produce for fucks sake XD
It's an attractive freeuse setup but I worry about the length if there's no choice or conflict. This took a few minutes to fly though and I don't know how you could avoid the same issue without having a ton of characters. Presumably revisiting characters that DO want to get pregnant after levelling up on others?
I hope MC grows a bit of a spine as he gets more comfortable, but I'm glad you didn't immediately start him off as some sort of sex fiend.
I like the overall concept (the Sex Pass) but this VN needs actual choices. I don’t want to play a whiny, struggling MC. I don’t want to be forced to select specific pass women. Let me actually choose the partners and choose how my MC reacts to the situation and people around him. This was a kinetic novel and those are, frankly, boring.
Also, you have a section with visible code: “Jake grabs Gail's body and tries to lean her back.[/center]”
I mean I get it's still early access but it'd be great if in the future you could have choices as you say. Doesn't have to be something super developed, maybe something like choice A and B where A might be more passive or tactful and B more confident. I think picking them ladies could be solved by just letting you pick them in whichever order you prefer for when the VN is finished.
All this said, maybe it's just not the vision the author has, and they have a character progression in mind whereas giving you choices might not make that much sense. Maybe look for this on some other project?
Thank you, I'll work on Jake's character, his personality, potential and future. We will be deviating from kinetic novel, the first two chapters were me trying to gauge if people liked the concept of the Sex Pass or not.
In some ways I like the concept for the game, and as a fan of Barely Working I enjoy the sort of freeuse aspect of this game, but man do I not like our protagonist in this new chapter. Like, Gail is obviously hot as fuck, she's drawn to be hot as fuck, and we the audience are obviously supposed to think she's hot as fuck, so it just feels really weird for our protagonist to act like she's old and disgusting and such when she's just so obviously super sexy. I also fucking HATE that he's like "why is she so loose?" That's not a real fucking thing, and the story treating her so shittily for being a whore despite being a game about having a lot of sex with random people just feels so fucking weird. Anyway, justice for my girl Gail, she deserves to get dicked down in the grocery store by someone better than fucking Jake or whatever our wet sack of a protagonist is called, lol
It didn't seem to me that Jake was having problems with her looks or age. He had problems with her behavior and smoking. And I agree with him.
Ok, she didn't want to do it in the bathroom. But why did she have to drag him around and stop to have a conversation. I would have told her not happening if she has a cigarette. And then when she pulled him out to stop and talk to her friend, I would have canceled the request and walked away. Then she made it worse when she stared talking shit about him to her friend
interesting concept. i think its fine being a strict VN style like its set up now BUT i think theres a lot more that can be done with it. i think it could fit really well in a more open RPG/management style game. have the app be proximity based and allow the player to select locations to go and spend time. give them stats they can work on by doing things like study, work out, practice charisma tasks, buying clothing/style, ect and have diffrent potential encounters based off that. letting the NPC accept or decline based on what stats are met or not. the management can be time bases as far as when you go places and what you do taking time as well as managing stats and earning/spending money. it could have so many diffrent variations in game results based on how ppl would play.
I love this concept and I was so hooked onto the story, I was so disappointed to see there weren't any more scenes after Diana! I would love for this game to be completed!! Can't wait to see Madison, she's so hot omg
I really enjoyed this proof of concept! The basis of the game is a really fun & hot hypothetical and I could see a lot of fun scenarios coming from this. (Maybe cameo encounters from your other games set in the modern day would be fun, like Candace & Jennifer!)
game good enough to pull me out of retirement to play and comment. Genuinely a fantastic concept and I look forward to following the development concept gets a solid 6.5/10
Hi, I enjoyed chapter 1 and think you did a great job interpreting the premise. I enjoyed most how clearly disinterested and even rude Diana was to the MC. I hope that the female characters being hostile/reluctant/put off and the sex being rushed and unromantic continues to be a major aspect of the story. If the sex pass just becomes an excuse to have normal vanilla sex then I think that defeats the point. The best part imo is that it's almost an obligation. Thanks for your hard work.
Good proof of concept, the art is pretty good and I'm looking forward to seeing more. Would definitely like to see some gameplay elements (choices, time management, etc.) but understandably as an early build that's maybe just not implemented yet. Some background music/ambiance would be nice. Voice acting would be appreciated in the future, but as of right now I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next
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Dude whys this genuinely a genius concept!
Thanks!
love it
Can't wait for the rest of story hope it's in full and not just chapters here and there
Bro es cine muy atrallente la historia y buen arte
Oye, esta en español o solamente en inglés?
Solo inglés bro
Rayos, voy a esperar entonces talvez lo saquen en español, gracias bro
I have a problem with decreased fertilization in 2 days of last blowing your load... in reality a week of waiting makes a man produce a much larger load and a man having sex multiple times a day ends up with a much smaller load... just stating facts.
I mean the story and setting is fine. The art is good, the writing's fine, I don't dislike the MC. I appreciate he has reservations and concerns about it all and doesn't just instantly go full horndog.
But I suppose the question is... what is the ultimate goal? Is it going to be a KN where we follow along on Jake's adventures? Or will an option be added later to deny girls skipping their story? Will it be a continuous romp introducing more and more girls? Or will we have a select cast that the story revolves around? Seeing the aftermaths of their lives and stories. Will it remain a pregnancy romp? Or will it go down the path of Jake wanting more from one or some of the girls he's knocked up? The bit in the intro where he looked at the family commenting on wanting a life like that. Kinda sets it up for a possibility.
I'd give more feedback other then it was fine. But I don't know what I'm working with here.
I like the drawing style. I like also that everything happens so fast and you can do it in public. BUT....there's not a story line. In the long period it becomes boring very fast. It needs a storyline. Try to add more background to the main character and add also his family. Do some Sweet Home Alabama scenes. Madison is not enough. Also remove the chapter menu. Let the scene fade in the next one. It has potential
That was pretty good. I enjoyed Gail's design. Though it was a little jarring how the public was just immediately blasé about the people having sex in public when the announcement was one day old. They were getting cum all over the produce for fucks sake XD
It's an attractive freeuse setup but I worry about the length if there's no choice or conflict. This took a few minutes to fly though and I don't know how you could avoid the same issue without having a ton of characters. Presumably revisiting characters that DO want to get pregnant after levelling up on others?
I hope MC grows a bit of a spine as he gets more comfortable, but I'm glad you didn't immediately start him off as some sort of sex fiend.
I like the overall concept (the Sex Pass) but this VN needs actual choices. I don’t want to play a whiny, struggling MC. I don’t want to be forced to select specific pass women. Let me actually choose the partners and choose how my MC reacts to the situation and people around him. This was a kinetic novel and those are, frankly, boring.
Also, you have a section with visible code: “Jake grabs Gail's body and tries to lean her back.[/center]”
I mean I get it's still early access but it'd be great if in the future you could have choices as you say. Doesn't have to be something super developed, maybe something like choice A and B where A might be more passive or tactful and B more confident. I think picking them ladies could be solved by just letting you pick them in whichever order you prefer for when the VN is finished.
All this said, maybe it's just not the vision the author has, and they have a character progression in mind whereas giving you choices might not make that much sense. Maybe look for this on some other project?
Thank you, I'll work on Jake's character, his personality, potential and future. We will be deviating from kinetic novel, the first two chapters were me trying to gauge if people liked the concept of the Sex Pass or not.
In some ways I like the concept for the game, and as a fan of Barely Working I enjoy the sort of freeuse aspect of this game, but man do I not like our protagonist in this new chapter. Like, Gail is obviously hot as fuck, she's drawn to be hot as fuck, and we the audience are obviously supposed to think she's hot as fuck, so it just feels really weird for our protagonist to act like she's old and disgusting and such when she's just so obviously super sexy. I also fucking HATE that he's like "why is she so loose?" That's not a real fucking thing, and the story treating her so shittily for being a whore despite being a game about having a lot of sex with random people just feels so fucking weird. Anyway, justice for my girl Gail, she deserves to get dicked down in the grocery store by someone better than fucking Jake or whatever our wet sack of a protagonist is called, lol
It didn't seem to me that Jake was having problems with her looks or age. He had problems with her behavior and smoking. And I agree with him.
Ok, she didn't want to do it in the bathroom. But why did she have to drag him around and stop to have a conversation. I would have told her not happening if she has a cigarette. And then when she pulled him out to stop and talk to her friend, I would have canceled the request and walked away. Then she made it worse when she stared talking shit about him to her friend
I like it, more please!
Very good, but may I ask if you are developing these two games simultaneously in the future？
Yes!
Chapter 3 Here WE come!!!
interesting concept. i think its fine being a strict VN style like its set up now BUT i think theres a lot more that can be done with it. i think it could fit really well in a more open RPG/management style game. have the app be proximity based and allow the player to select locations to go and spend time. give them stats they can work on by doing things like study, work out, practice charisma tasks, buying clothing/style, ect and have diffrent potential encounters based off that. letting the NPC accept or decline based on what stats are met or not. the management can be time bases as far as when you go places and what you do taking time as well as managing stats and earning/spending money. it could have so many diffrent variations in game results based on how ppl would play.
Thank you!
Very nice so far, looking for the full version :)
The story is insane cool!
Can't wait for more
absolutely love this!
This was so fun! I love how mean Diana is and how matter-of-fact she is, too! It's very fun and I look forward to seeing more!
I love this concept and I was so hooked onto the story, I was so disappointed to see there weren't any more scenes after Diana! I would love for this game to be completed!! Can't wait to see Madison, she's so hot omg
cant wait for this to be a full fledged game or visual novel!
I really enjoyed this proof of concept! The basis of the game is a really fun & hot hypothetical and I could see a lot of fun scenarios coming from this. (Maybe cameo encounters from your other games set in the modern day would be fun, like Candace & Jennifer!)
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Seems like a fun visual novel, potentially a game.
This is amazing love the concept, this has a high possibility to become a good visual novel
More and
game good enough to pull me out of retirement to play and comment. Genuinely a fantastic concept and I look forward to following the development concept gets a solid 6.5/10
Yes this is great please more
this is gas so far keep up the solid work
peak
Hi, I enjoyed chapter 1 and think you did a great job interpreting the premise. I enjoyed most how clearly disinterested and even rude Diana was to the MC. I hope that the female characters being hostile/reluctant/put off and the sex being rushed and unromantic continues to be a major aspect of the story. If the sex pass just becomes an excuse to have normal vanilla sex then I think that defeats the point. The best part imo is that it's almost an obligation. Thanks for your hard work.
I need more T-T. This is such a good concept. It would be amazing if this got fully developed.
Novel concept and well executed.
Entertaining and good visuals
Pls continue the story
we need more feet and footjob
more please. Loved it. Get some more girls as well.
Es un juego bastante bueno
This is so awesome and the art style is great!
If there's no redhead, I'm out of luck.
Good proof of concept, the art is pretty good and I'm looking forward to seeing more. Would definitely like to see some gameplay elements (choices, time management, etc.) but understandably as an early build that's maybe just not implemented yet. Some background music/ambiance would be nice. Voice acting would be appreciated in the future, but as of right now I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next